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“Is there something terribly wrong with me?”

I sigh and look up from my book. In the evening light my grandmother stares back at me, utterly unaware that it’s the third time she’s asked in as many minutes. Complex maps of wrinkles frame her wide eyes, each crease charting the grief, joy and laughter of a lifetime she is slowly forgetting. I look at her and I remember the wit and spark that used to punctuate her speech. I remember the way she used to strike up a conversation with anyone, anywhere; how she’d find wonder in the simplicity of everyday life. Her curiosity, her sense of adventure, her love of the world and of all the people in it have been replaced by a child-like fear of the unfamiliar.

I look at my grandmother and behind her old, tired eyes I see a young girl who has lost hold of her mother’s hand in a world full of strangers.

“No, Grandma. There’s nothing wrong with you at all.”


curtains shift –
the faint glow
of a waning moon
A haibun.

I feel like this is a bit cheesy, but it's also the truth as plainly as I can tell it. What are you supposed to say the third, fourth, fifth, sixth time?
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Grandma by the-beastie is redolent with heart-wrenching truth. ( Featured by neurotype )
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hazel-thorne Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You've said so much, so beautifully in so few words. It made me sad, but the grandchild's care and sympathy was touching.
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:iconthe-beastie:
the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Demon57 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Nicely done and congratulations on DD
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:iconthe-beastie:
the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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Demon57 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome!:heart:
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wei-en Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
This is really...I don't know. It fits together well.
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:iconthe-beastie:
the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading :)
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rufus-kun Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of my grandmother, 93 and still going strong. Happy to see everyone but can't remember her family's names, as long as she is happy we don't mind :)
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That is the most important thing :) thank you for reading.
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Azuri-chann Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist
It's really beautiful...and sad. Now I have this urge to go to my grandma and hug her. Really great work! Congrats on the DD!  ; A ;
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:iconthe-beastie:
the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Go give her loads of hugs! :) thanks for commenting.
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FractalEyes Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I just lost my mother; she was 95.  She did not have any type of dementia (though she did get forgetful and would tell the same jokes and stories a lot) so I feel very fortunate that she was aware I was there with her the night before she died. 

I am sorry to hear your grandmother is not so lucky. :hug:
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading. It sounds like your mother was very loved :) best wishes :hug:
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FractalEyes Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
She truly was and not just by my family.  I stayed with her for two years (she was 91-93 years old then) and everywhere I went with her, people would always tell me how much they loved her. :aww:
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sometimesidrawshit Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student General Artist
My grandma died of alsheimers four years ago on Memorial day. I never got to see her much but I have these distinct memories of the old timey trailer she used to live in, her buying me watermelon and cheap model cars and yelling at my cousin, and that gravelly yet somehow comforting voice of hers. And her jowls. I didn't see her at the end and I'm glad for that because that's the way I like to think of her-- as someone very kind and mothering but still very human. You made me think of my Granny at a time where I've nearly forgotten her and at this juncture that's something I never hope to do. 
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your comment - I'm glad this resonated with you. I'm sorry for your loss :hug:
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shuryukan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I cried ;-;.

BEAUTIFUL!
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Arokag Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You didnt cry.
Iidot.
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GreenElephantGirl Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
Charming.
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Arokag Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Quite so.
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GreenElephantGirl Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
Are you OK? Is there something upsetting you? Like, a reason for snapping like you did up there?
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Arokag Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No.
I just hate.
Everyone.
<3
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GreenElephantGirl Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
Oh. Well, I'm really sorry to hear that. :(
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Arokag Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
;v;
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
Wonderful writing!
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The topic might be a little cheesy, but it's so plainly told it's appealing, and the imagery in the end haiku is both evocative and just enough unexpected (I would've thought a waning moon).
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
PS. you were absolutely right about the waning moon :)
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:iconthe-beastie:
the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry this has taken me so long to get to, but thank you so much for the DD :)
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Lucrexcia Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Aww, so sweet, and yet sad. :(
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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cremep0ps Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
i've never really had anyone important to me die or have a disease or anything so i don't know what it's like. i still kinda enjoyed this though.
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading :)
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pa had developed dementia before his health shut down and he died. This poem of your is a reminder that we should cherish the people in our lives, even when they aren't at their best. :huggle:
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kind comment, and I'm so sorry for your loss. Best wishes :hug:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:glomp: Thank you very much.
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segura2112 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Beautiful and heart breaking, I lost my mother 4 years to this. Thank You and congrats on the DD,
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so sorry for your loss. Thank you for your kind comment :hug:
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Shawn-McClurg Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
This is completely true.
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading :)
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XxPolkadotxX Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very beautifully written...really hit home for me. Reminds me of my grandparents, my grandpa had Alzheimer's and my grandma had dementia.
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading and I'm glad this resonated with you :hug:
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EpicLPSWolf Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of my oma. <3 I love her.
She can't remember anything for more than 4 minutes. But it's so sweet because the only thing she remembers is her husband. Who's... dead. And she forgot that he died, so every day when my aunt comes to visit her, she asks when he will be home from work. It breaks our hearts to tell her that he's passed... :(
:heart:
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry you are having to deal with that - but it sounds like she has the perfect, loving family to surround her :hug:
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EpicLPSWolf Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. :hug:
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KairaNakune Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
same thing just that my aunt is completely alone. She is 94 years old. No childeren, friends, husband, cousins, sisters or brothers but she knows she alone. She isnt really related to me but I call her that. She can't remember anything for 4 or 3 minutes either. :/
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EpicLPSWolf Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:(
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KairaNakune Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah...
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Itsmellsofdoughnuts Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
What a beautiful-- wait, what's a haibun?

Uh, anyway... This is really, really lovely. I try not to dwell on things that get me super emotional.... I'm I might start crying later. But in a good-way-bad-way, good way being first.
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(This is me when I can't find words.)
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) a haibun is a japanese form which comprises of a piece of prose poetry followed by a haiku.
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